Read your whole fic in one go (well, several goes, as I was being super ADD today) and took notes on everything I loved, like, A LOT. They are as follows:
1. The looooong build-up. Seriously I almost love the dancing around before the sex more than the sex itself. Also it was so worth it! 1. Zach sucking at bowling! Hee! 2. OMG YOU WIN AT DIALOGUE. You get their voices down so well, and I was cracking up so hard pretty much every other line. 3. Cranky Zach! Hayden txting Chris to come cheer him up. 4. Chris' first blowjob. That point where he realises he's making Zach lose control. 5. Man-bits! Sphincter!!! OMG Chris' prostate! *flails* Irrevocably! 6. LOL the banter! Again! 7. Zach's note! Chris' "subtle" reply! OH GOD THE TXTING!!! 8. Chris on the English language. <3333 9. The thought that someone could walk in here right now and see you like this, pants around your ankles and three of my fingers in your gorgeous ass? I too let out a strangled sound at this. GUH. I practically felt mindmelded to Chris during this scene; your Zach is so hot it should be illegal. 10. D'awwww. Chris & Zach being all mushy and stuff. <333 11. Ahahahaha Noah shoutout! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA ZOE. <3
Basically, if I sound like a crazy person, it is because you have BROKEN MY BRAIN. *melts into a puddle of goo*
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Date: 2009-10-31 07:04 am (UTC)1. The looooong build-up. Seriously I almost love the dancing around before the sex more than the sex itself. Also it was so worth it!
1. Zach sucking at bowling! Hee!
2. OMG YOU WIN AT DIALOGUE. You get their voices down so well, and I was cracking up so hard pretty much every other line.
3. Cranky Zach! Hayden txting Chris to come cheer him up.
4. Chris' first blowjob. That point where he realises he's making Zach lose control.
5. Man-bits! Sphincter!!! OMG Chris' prostate! *flails* Irrevocably!
6. LOL the banter! Again!
7. Zach's note! Chris' "subtle" reply! OH GOD THE TXTING!!!
8. Chris on the English language. <3333
9. The thought that someone could walk in here right now and see you like this, pants around your ankles and three of my fingers in your gorgeous ass?
I too let out a strangled sound at this. GUH. I practically felt mindmelded to Chris during this scene; your Zach is so hot it should be illegal.
10. D'awwww. Chris & Zach being all mushy and stuff. <333
11. Ahahahaha Noah shoutout! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA ZOE. <3
Basically, if I sound like a crazy person, it is because you have BROKEN MY BRAIN. *melts into a puddle of goo*