Oh wow. This may be my favorite of your fics. I adore your banter and your sex scenes are SMOKING hot, but there is something so completely left on the page about this one that I adored. I loved the little details you put in to justify both Zach's crush, and his anguish (like the sandwich, which was gold). I like how succinctly you described why this particular unrequited crush was so painful, and how Chris being such a good guy about it made it worse.
And I've been trying to figure out why, but for some reason, the fact that you opened this with them breaking off the kiss, skipping the build to the kiss, struck me as the most perfect choice ever. I can't explain why though, I just loved it.
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Date: 2010-05-25 02:23 am (UTC)And I've been trying to figure out why, but for some reason, the fact that you opened this with them breaking off the kiss, skipping the build to the kiss, struck me as the most perfect choice ever. I can't explain why though, I just loved it.
Loved it all! Beautifully done!!